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of translation according to the Guidelines of 1969 (‘Comme le prevoit’)
These extracts from the Canon are marked to indicate the scale and effect of the paraphrasing and omission in the first translation of the new mass. The Latin original on the left shows in square brackets elements not present in the translation. A literal translation, similarly marked, indicates what was left out, or to put it more neutrally, not explicitly translated. I will leave it to the reader to decide where such omissions are for stylistic reasons and where they seem to have been theologically or ecumenically motivated. Since the new translation covers everything in the original text, it is not necessary to give it here.
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1 Te [igitur], [clementissime] Pater, per Iesum Christum, Filium tuum, [Dominum nostrum], [supplices rogamus ac] petimus, uti accepta habeas, et benedicas, haec dona, [haec munera], haec sancta sacrifcia [illibata] |
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[Most merciful] Father, we [therefore] [humbly pray and beseech] you, asking through Jesus Christ your Son, [our Lord], to accept and bless these gifts, [these offerings], these holy [unblemished] sacrifices
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2 Memento, Domine, [famulorum famularumque tuarum] et omnium circumstantium [quorum] tibi fides cognita est et [nota devotio], [pro quibus] tibi offerimus: [vel qui tibi offerunt] hoc sacrificium laudis, pro se suisque omnibus: pro redemptione [animarum suarum], [pro spe salutis] et incolumitatis suae: [tibique reddunt vota sua aeterno Deo], vivo et vero. |
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Remember, Lord [your servants and handmaids] and all present here, [whose] faith and [devotion] are known to you, [for whom] we offer, [or who offer up to you,] this sacrifice of praise for themselves and their families, for the redemption [of their souls,] [in the hope of] good health [and salvation] and [who now fulfil their obligation] to you, the eternal, living and true God.
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Communicantes, et [memoriam ] venerantes, [in primis] [gloriosae] semper Virginis Mariae, Genetricis Dei et Domini nostri Jesu Christi: sed et [beati] Ioseph, eiusdem Sponsi, et [beatorum] Apostolorum ac Martyrum tuorum Petri et Pauli ... et omnium Sanctorum [tuorum];[ quorum] meritis precibusque concedas, ut in omnibus protectionis tuae muniamur auxilio.
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In communion with, and venerating in [the first place], [the memory] of the [glorious] ever virgin Mary, mother of our Lord and God Jesus Christ; also of [blessed ]Joseph, her spouse, and your [blessed] apostles and martyrs Peter and Paul,… And of all [your] saints, through [whose] merits and prayers, grant that we may in all things be defended and aided by your protection.
(Translation by the author)
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1. Several items, particularly titles and adjectives have been left out, which diminishes the rhetorical effectiveness and religious character of the text; the translation ignores the tripling of the words to do with ‘asking’
2..This section contains the most striking examples of the ways in which the translation avoids complicated structures such as relative clauses (those beginning ‘who’ or ‘which’). Also, some items have not been translated (such as references to ‘souls’ and ‘salvation’).
3.Simplified structure; ‘desacralising’ omission of ‘first of all’ and adjectives ‘glorious’ before Mary, and ‘blessed’ before Joseph and apostles.